I stand here in the still of the storm,
waiting for you to take me in your arms
Longing for you to whisper sweet nothings
and missing our long wordless talks.
The zephyr, it flirts with my locks
but i fell nothing but numb
The soft ocean water kisses my feet
and then recedes...
The fog, it blinds my view,
but I'm certain I will see you when you come.
The sky disappears into darkness,
But I'm sure our love will break the dark and bring back the glow.
I wait,I wait
But Alas! you didn't come
The chirping of the birds is now unheard.
And you leave darkness as my only support..
My veins are now slit,
and it weeps of crimson tears.
My heart is slowing but still waiting,
but of fear I'm not aware
for the mirage of your love i'm taking with me...
Avni
December 28 2007 at 5:46pm
(note--this was my first real attempt at poetry, so it really doesn't qualify for criticism ...hahaha..joking..alll comment are most welcome)
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4 comments:
wooww!!! its such a beautiful poem gurll...!!! amazingly affective... man!!! from 2day ur ma pp(personal poet) lol..!!! man! its gr8!!
talk about
"channe ki jhaad per chadana "
You were damn right.I like it,except for the crimson tears
went a little heavy on me
maybe?
But then.. You still are my favorite poetry writing senior
-sapphiredrama
Honest opinion- 'The poem is one of the best first attempts I have seen. The best thing about it was that you dint just stick to a single rhyme scheme... but focused more on the message and trying to make sense with it. :)
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